Let me know what you think. It’s kind of dark
Wrote it to this instrumental:
Out of sight, out of mind,
out of time, to decided.
Do we run?
Should I hide?
For the rest, of my life.
x2
This little girl named Sarah didn’t have a problem in the world
Till her daddy died she cried visions swirled she curled up against her Mom
Holding palms to keep her calm tears leaked down her cheeks
She didn’t speak for weeks except the shrieks she made while she was asleep
She kept discrete dealing with her feelings kneeling praying for any kind of healing
Hoping her daddy was hearing Sarah’s Mom heard every word through the ceiling
It killed her seeing her daughter grieving so she got back into dating making
Attempt’s to find a husband but found no one that could replace the space
Of Sarah’s father but they were running out of dollars, it was hard raising a toddler alone
They had to get loans just to keep on their phone, they started becoming all bone
They couldn’t afford good food, Sarah’s Mom would strip nude just to pay their dues
She started talking to her private clients then met an appliance man named Dan
Who offered her a wedding band and She said Yes then Sarah started to feel a mess
Out of sight, out of mind,
out of time, to decided.
Do we run?
Should I hide?
For the rest, of my life.
x2
Dan was a ticking time bomb always abusing Sarah’s Mom
She would vomit in disgust that she had fallen for his trust
He was in it for lust but she needed him for bills
Sarah would get the chills watchin her dig in the pill bottle
What a model for a child Sarah no longer smiled
all the while at school she felt isolated and degraded
That her Mom affiliated with a person that she hated
Sarah persuaded to her Mom that they needed to move on
So upon getting home they packed up all of their things
Then the door bell ringed it was Dan he had forgot his key
He looked through the window saw the bags and screamed violently
Don’t you dare fvcking leave! he covered his fist over with his sleeve
Punched out the window then went niave strangling his wife
Sarah was shocked in fright watching him take her mothers life
She quickly grabbed a knife and repeatedly stabbed him threw his wind pipe
Out of sight, out of mind,
out of time, to decided.
Do we run?
Should I hide?
For the rest, of my life.
x2
It’s a real rap. Came from the heart. but people now of days like people that suck at rapping and just talk about sex and weed….
I enjoyed that. In a technical analysis, it didn’t have many multi syllable rhymes but the rap was riddled with internalls so as long as there are plenty of them, lyrical quality should be good. You should pick a good flow though, as I was reading the lyrics and that was the one thing i didn’t like about it: i didn’t know how to.
You wrote from the heart. That’s good.