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Is My Mass Effect Oc Too Much Of A Mary-sue?


I have a little OC-crew in my mind and all of them seem not too Mary & Gary Sue-ish, but I’m having problems with one of them, the youngest one. Her name is Amy and she is 14, her grandmother was one of the first humans to be subjected to Element Zero (accidentally of course) and her mother received biotic powers as well as L2 implants. Later on the Alliance found out that if they played around with the genetic coding of the first gen-biotics and subject them to just enough element zero their children could posses brain power that could out smart even the salarians. However the project was a failure, the children ended up mentally impaired, or dead within weeks of birth, that is of course except for a tiny percentage of children but the project was closed down before any of them were recorded. Amy was born shortly after the project was closed, with gifts that surpassed anything that they could ever hope for. Her mother died during childbirth so she had to live with her grandmother who was bitter towards the government, and the world for her lost daughter. That bitterness passed on to Amy, who later on became a recluse, long story short, using her extremely high IQ she became interested in bomb making, and even made business selling home made bombs and weapons to the black market under the alias “Aegis”. However, her cover was blown and mercenaries who felt like cutting the middle man stormed into her house, killed her grandmother, and kidnapped her to their base. There, my other OC unwittingly save her. With no where to go and plenty of rage to spare, she basically forced herself into his crew, saying that they wouldn’t find a better explosive expert anywhere else, which was true. So the main OC begrudgingly let her join on the exception that she does not leave the ship for field missions. Another reason way the main OC let her join was because she explained to him that because of her “power” her brain develops faster than humanly possible, so even though she is a genius, there might be a large chance that she will go brain dead or lose insanity by the time she’s 20, so she really is at the prime of her life. Another problem she faces is she has to keep her superior brainpower a secret, because she knows the minute the government find out that the project was a success they would start it back up again despite the fact that it would endanger countless of children’s lives.

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