I have continually gotten negative responses with this resume. I am using this for civilian jobs only. I also have a federal resume that is about 4 pages long with no results. I want to transfer over to the human resources field. What do i need to do to break in this field. the format is slightly different, however the resume is as follows:
Hank Castin
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Education: Master’s Degree Human Resource Management, Webster University, 2011, 3.4 GPA
Bachelor Degree Criminal Justice, Ashford University, 2008, 3.8 GPA
Military Experience: US MARINE CORPS
Feb 2009 Present: Ground Safety Manager
• Organize training sessions for over 450 employees. Monitor programs, systems and processes for efficiency and provide recommendations for improvement.
• Brief senior executives on sections compliance to safety, environmental, and hazmat directives.
• Market safety programs to over 450 employees ensuring proper understanding and effective usage is generated by each program
• Develop, update, and maintain spreadsheets to be entered into mass database (MOL) for organizational record keeping.
• Inspect 16 establishments on proper safety techniques to remain in accordance with OSHA standards. Identified numerous procedural discrepancies; determined a plan of action and effected corrective measures resulting in significant man-hour savings.
Feb 08 Jan 09: Maintenance Chief
• Analyzed equipment with an estimated value of 5 million dollars. Maintained all mechanical systems to achieve optimum performance.
• Acted as a mentor to five employees’s while continually giving guidance on payroll and educational benefits.
• Innovative Team Leader – coordinated research, evaluated five employee’s job performance while maintaining a high level of professionalism when detailing areas of improvement.
• Expertly managed redistribution and capital expense equipment including tooling and repair parts in excess of 1 million dollars.
Feb 07 Jan 08: Supervisor of Security
• Superior leadership and management skills with direct supervision of over 40 employees’.
• Supervised and trained a team of 40 employees on weekly bases that were required to provide security for Camp Johnson training base.
• Administrator – created weekly work schedules in accordance with employees needs while satisfying the daily work duties of the organization.
ADDITIONAL SKILLS:
• Government Secret Clearance
• 60 WPM
• Microsoft Word
• Microsoft PowerPoint
• Microsoft Excel
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Can Someone Read My Resume And Offer Suggestions Or Advice.?
Posted on March 28, 2011.
1. Look at specific positions that you’re interested in and try to use any of the same wording that they’re looking for.
2. Make an entire section highlighting your skills that are applicable toward human resources work. Put it toward the top. If your resume gets skimmed (which it will) those skills will stand out.
3. Include a cover letter that summarizes which skills you have that they are asking for.
way way too much verbiage
too much detail
simplify-one page
one paragraph of total work experience[sales?production?finance?]
education [ masters,doctor,B.A.]
more detailed information available upon contact
When you list Education, you have to list the College name first and then the degree. So,
Education: Webster University, Master’s Degree Human Resource Management, GPA 3.4
I would not include “Military Experience’ unless you had a job title and the experience was relevant.
If I were you I would make the entire thing fit on one page.
Under “Maintenance Chief’ I would reword Innovative Team Leader and make it say ‘Coordinated team and research innovatively etc.
I would reword ‘Expertly managed redistribution and capital expense equipment..’ in more laymans terms, such as “Expertly managed capital expense equipment and its redistribution accomplishing in excess of 1 million dollars profit to the bottom line.’
There should be an Awards section if possible.
I would only use the words ‘skills’ instead of ‘additional skills’ to draw more emphasis on them.
Maybe it’s because I’m a girl, but a resume should always be pretty and pleasing to read (meaning simple) and to yours I would add an ‘Objective’ to the top with the name of the job title you are seeking.
I really like the experience you listed but remember, it needs to say ‘Professional Experience’ above it.
Best of luck.