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Please help me to point out the positives and negatives of my essay. Be honest and harsh if necessary.
The ____’s are places where I am still trying to come up with something to say.
I’m still concerned about these things:
– Grammar
– Fluidity
– Content
– How it transitions from the first to second paragraph seems funky
– How to effectively continue – the main purpose is supposed to be the challenges of being an entrepreneur at 16
and just my transitions in general…
Ever since my childhood, I have always been passionate about art, in all of its versatile and varying forms. From the days I spent teaching myself how to braid hair at the age of five so that I could practice creative hairstyles on my grandmother, to the hours I spent awestruck in front of a glowing computer screen designing birthday cards for my friends in elementary school, this certain passion of mine had grown immensely at such a young age. However, like all the other children at that time, I dreamt of becoming something extraordinary, like an astronaut, an archaeologist, or a part of the FBI. It wasn’t until the very beginning of my teenage years that I realized that the only thing that had been with me throughout my entire life was art. Amidst all of my peaks and valleys, it had always been there in the forefront of my life. So I pursued it.
By the time I was twelve, I found my true calling, my niche in the art world. Graphic design. It was the perfect combination of my love for all mediums of art and my growing appreciation for computers and the digital age.
During the summer between my junior and senior years of high school, I combined my ever prevalent passion for art, my inordinate thirst for knowledge, and my intensifying curiosity of “the real world”. I became an entrepreneur at the age of sixteen.
Sixteen was a ____ time of my life. It was a time where I _____. At sixteen, I learned how to drive. At sixteen, I became the editor of my high school’s yearbook. At sixteen, I started my own graphic and web design business, Beauxlent. At sixteen, I turned this challenge into an opportunity.

Okay, so I’m gay. When I look at other gay people I kind of feel ashamed because of their actions. Not all gay people, only the really feminine ones. Is this weird, does anyone else feel the same way? It’s as if I don’t want to be affiliated with them.

Please help me to point out the positives and negatives of my essay. Be honest and harsh if necessary.
The ____’s are places where I am still trying to come up with something to say.
I’m still concerned about these things:
– Grammar
– Fluidity
– Content
– How it transitions from the first to second paragraph seems funky
– How to effectively continue – the main purpose is supposed to be the challenges of being an entrepreneur at 16
and just my transitions in general…
Ever since my childhood, I have always been passionate about art, in all of its versatile and varying forms. From the days I spent teaching myself how to braid hair at the age of five so that I could practice creative hairstyles on my grandmother, to the hours I spent awestruck in front of a glowing computer screen designing birthday cards for my friends in elementary school, this certain passion of mine had grown immensely at such a young age. However, like all the other children at that time, I dreamt of becoming something extraordinary, like an astronaut, an archaeologist, or a part of the FBI. It wasn’t until the very beginning of my teenage years that I realized that the only thing that had been with me throughout my entire life was art. Amidst all of my peaks and valleys, it had always been there in the forefront of my life. So I pursued it.
By the time I was twelve, I found my true calling, my niche in the art world. Graphic design. It was the perfect combination of my love for all mediums of art and my growing appreciation for computers and the digital age.
During the summer between my junior and senior years of high school, I combined my ever prevalent passion for art, my inordinate thirst for knowledge, and my intensifying curiosity of “the real world”. I became an entrepreneur at the age of sixteen.
Sixteen was a ____ time of my life. It was a time where I _____. At sixteen, I learned how to drive. At sixteen, I became the editor of my high school’s yearbook. At sixteen, I started my own graphic and web design business, Beauxlent. At sixteen, I turned this challenge into an opportunity.

Okay, so I’m gay. When I look at other gay people I kind of feel ashamed because of their actions. Not all gay people, only the really feminine ones. Is this weird, does anyone else feel the same way? It’s as if I don’t want to be affiliated with them.

I’m 16 and attempting to start an acting career in Ohio (don’t tell me to move to LA – i’m with an agency and there is at least a small market in every city) – anyways, i’ve found a couple great auditions from actingmidwest.com, where directors post the specifics of their films or commercials they want to cast and leave an email to contact them through. (if you live in the midwest, check it out, it’s a great source!)
I found 2 great possibilities that would work for my age – one a low budget SAG! I emailed the email they gave with my headshots and resume and received no response.
One of these was posted about a week ago and said this:
“Casting session will be November 22, 2011, so respond promptly. Online casting will be available for those 50 miles outside of Cincinnati, Ohio”
I responded the day of, and still have not recieved a response for it. Today is November 21.
The other, the SAG, said that some of the actors would need training in combat. I can’t quite explain it, so this is what they said:
“Kino 13- One of 13 fighters that protect the treasure. We are looking for looks and fighting skills/athletic ability. 11 roles open. Your audition will consist of you in your unique wardrobe, in character, then performing martial arts, gymnastics, athletic moves. NO DIALOGUE, JUST CHARACTER expressions and movement. By the way: If you do not understand the difference between on screen and real combat, DO NOT SUBMIT! We have no time for seeing who is the “best fighter ion the world” on our set! This is a MOVIE not a tournament! Here is the film description of the Kino 13, think of them as X-Men type characters, but not with super powers, other than those described.
Description: The Red Rock Project. A secret operation using the paranormal abilities of the worlds thirteen deadliest psychic, psychotic killers. Named The Kino Thirteen, they are Individuals with super senses, advanced fighting skills and sociopaths tendencies. Psychic vampires, steroid infused combat troops.
Jakob Flint’s kids-(1) Male, teen age ***(1)Female-teen age***. The unlucky children of the film’s star, Jakob Flint. They are held hostage by Vanzetti and his men and meet a quick demise, Mafia style. Ages: 13-17, Caucasian. No dialog. For these auditions, the teen agers in question need to do a monologue of their choice from any movie featuring an emotional range for a teen ager. This monologue must run no longer than 3 minutes. There are no lines in the film, but ACTING talent through emoting is ESSENTIAL!”
Because of the way they spaced it on the page, I can’t tell if they meant that even Jakob Flint’s daughter needs combat training, so I emailed to clarify and also sent my other information. Did I ruin it by doing this?
Sorry if that was confusing, and if you skipped to here, basically I sent in a request to audition for 2 films that I would reallllly like to do, but recieved no response. I don’t want to be annoying and submit again (I wouldn’t do that) but I don’t know how to not let this opportunity slip from my fingers!! Help!

I am doing my biology lab. my lab is about Ecological Niche. bacteria is our model organism. we set temperature and PH as the “space” or niche. finally I get a graph PH vs temperature. part of organism’s environment actually is same. so, I think my results doesn’t prove Gause’s principle. however, I am not sure about my conclusion.