I am writing a “classical” romance story between a Prince and a peasant girl. The Prince is the son and heir to the throne of King Damien and Queen Alexia. One day the Prince, age 16 and in his rebellious phase, sneaks away from the castle because he’s bored and decides to go into town because he has never seen the market place before.
A few miles away, on a farm, lives Kylin with her mother, they are somewhat very poor but love the fact that it doesn’t matter to them. Kylin is a fun loving smart girl that is sort of rebellious and goes against somewhat with what her mother tells her to do. Since her mother was giving nursing Kylin when she fell il, she doesn’t know what the Prince looks like or even knows his name because her mother wasn’t there to give her blessing. As Kylin goes down to the market place she accidental bumps into the Prince and they exchange a conversation and become best friends. They meet up a few days later at her house and that evening the guards come and take the Prince away.
Daimen is not happy about his son falling in love with a peasent girl and says that his son is forbidden to speak or see Kylin ever again. But the Prince ignores this and they meet in secret. Now the young lovers must overcome the obstilcies they face if they truly want to be in love despite what class they are in, and the King as well.
That is pretty much the summary of the book! so what do u think? all suggestions are good. 😀
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Is This A Good Romance Story?
Posted on January 2, 2012.
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Is This A Good Romance Story?
Posted on January 2, 2012.
I am writing a “classical” romance story between a Prince and a peasant girl. The Prince is the son and heir to the throne of King Damien and Queen Alexia. One day the Prince, age 16 and in his rebellious phase, sneaks away from the castle because he’s bored and decides to go into town because he has never seen the market place before.
A few miles away, on a farm, lives Kylin with her mother, they are somewhat very poor but love the fact that it doesn’t matter to them. Kylin is a fun loving smart girl that is sort of rebellious and goes against somewhat with what her mother tells her to do. Since her mother was giving nursing Kylin when she fell il, she doesn’t know what the Prince looks like or even knows his name because her mother wasn’t there to give her blessing. As Kylin goes down to the market place she accidental bumps into the Prince and they exchange a conversation and become best friends. They meet up a few days later at her house and that evening the guards come and take the Prince away.
Daimen is not happy about his son falling in love with a peasent girl and says that his son is forbidden to speak or see Kylin ever again. But the Prince ignores this and they meet in secret. Now the young lovers must overcome the obstilcies they face if they truly want to be in love despite what class they are in, and the King as well.
That is pretty much the summary of the book! so what do u think? all suggestions are good. 😀
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Mya says:
Hehe, sounds cute! Kind of a play on Romeo-Juliet, but it sounds pretty interesting so far!
Just don’t let it get too “typical”. Play it up a bit, maybe make something surprising happen (not a faking of death, hahahaha).
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It is a nicely done story. I’ve heard things like it before, so this sounds more like a children’s story instead of a novel. I would add more confusion and drama before writing. I kind of expected it.
Something I might add was that sort of Snow White thing. The King notices the Prince is rebelling & orders the peasant dead. The Prince overhears and tries to save her. At the last moment, the King is telling the Prince to choose: Kylin or his royal crown, for the Prince would be disinherited. Or you can make it Romeo & Juliet, and you can kill them off in a tragic romance. Death or potential death would make this suspenseful. Maybe the Queen falls ill, and the Prince is too wound up with Kylin that the King get’s angrier? Oh my gosh! They could run away together 😀
Another thing… Kylin is a very modern name. I would suggest using a more Victorian era style name, like Victoria, Elizabeth, Iris, Rose, Della, Victoire (veek-twah), Dawn, Grace… You see the point:)
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I like the path of a Righteous Prince putting aside his title for the seductively seducing elements of the peasant girl that has taken his Heart. Good concept because plenty of wiggle room for a climax the king could send a unit to retrieve the son and try to reconcile how he failed to teach him The ways of Royalty or go with the Prince learning how to adjust to a lower level of living. Good concept just on how the character growths and reactions to the problems they face unravel correctly and you got it, one hint I have is let them write themselves don’t break character and experiment with things just picture how to place them and stay with that flow. Have fun writing.
Hehe, sounds cute! Kind of a play on Romeo-Juliet, but it sounds pretty interesting so far!
Just don’t let it get too “typical”. Play it up a bit, maybe make something surprising happen (not a faking of death, hahahaha).
😀
Have fun writing!
It is a nicely done story. I’ve heard things like it before, so this sounds more like a children’s story instead of a novel. I would add more confusion and drama before writing. I kind of expected it.
Something I might add was that sort of Snow White thing. The King notices the Prince is rebelling & orders the peasant dead. The Prince overhears and tries to save her. At the last moment, the King is telling the Prince to choose: Kylin or his royal crown, for the Prince would be disinherited. Or you can make it Romeo & Juliet, and you can kill them off in a tragic romance. Death or potential death would make this suspenseful. Maybe the Queen falls ill, and the Prince is too wound up with Kylin that the King get’s angrier? Oh my gosh! They could run away together 😀
Another thing… Kylin is a very modern name. I would suggest using a more Victorian era style name, like Victoria, Elizabeth, Iris, Rose, Della, Victoire (veek-twah), Dawn, Grace… You see the point:)
Have fun!
I like the path of a Righteous Prince putting aside his title for the seductively seducing elements of the peasant girl that has taken his Heart. Good concept because plenty of wiggle room for a climax the king could send a unit to retrieve the son and try to reconcile how he failed to teach him The ways of Royalty or go with the Prince learning how to adjust to a lower level of living. Good concept just on how the character growths and reactions to the problems they face unravel correctly and you got it, one hint I have is let them write themselves don’t break character and experiment with things just picture how to place them and stay with that flow. Have fun writing.