I wrote a book earlier this year call ‘In a City Named Joy’ and it is available on Amazon.com. I wanted to know if this was a good summary or not. I would also appreciate it if you could suggest a way to improve it.
When Amy Harris, Morgan Anderson, and Brittany Edwards move to a small hill next to a city named Joy, they find that things may not be as normal as they expect. The women are shocked when the people in the city aren’t as nice as they would have considered for a city with such a name. Brittany stops a man from destroying a super market and Morgan tries to help a man cure his five year old sister. Amy seems to have just been taken along for the ride.In the middle of all of this a
scientist is trying to make himself famous by creating an invention to kill the people on death row.
When this is tried out on a young woman named Grace, who has an unusual habit of killing people with their worst fears, things go wrong. Amy, Morgan, and Brittany end up having to save the city with the help of two men that they met in the city and the Immortal who insists on helping even though Immortals tend to think highly of themselves because they can’t die.
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Is This A Good Summary?
Posted on December 20, 2012.
I would rephrase part of it to read something like this “…..move near a city named Joy (unless the hill part is needed), but the name is deceiving, people aren’t joyous.
I wonder why Amy isnt’ helping. That doesnt sound nice to me.
I’d rephrase “when this is tried out” to “When the scientist attempts this on a young woman…”
I wonder what kind of story this is that involves three women saving the city with “immortals”.
I’d also leave out most to keep the readers hanging. I can’t do all the work, but I hope my last sentence helps a bit.
For example. I love twilight, but Stephenie Meyer ruined the summary when she said: “First, Edward was a vampire”. Totally ruined the suspense if I didn’t know that before hand.
Here’s my example for my novel, Sisters with a Secret:
The Putnam and the Delia sisters discover a secret so compelling that it will put them in danger if the wrong people find out. They can’t back away from what they have learned and have to deal with it, one way or another.
I don’t say what the secret is or who the bad people are.