Affiliate Marketing Secrets

trades and business transactions that occur illegally. like the sale of illegal firearms, or drugs, or loan sharks and mafia business. human trafficking, child porn, bodily organs, are all traded illegally. this usually takes place in clandestine places, like secret offices hidden in the back of buildings, or in alleyways, or places owned by criminals. and these days, it happens on the internet more and more.

Ok, so i want to write something that people will enjoy, maybe a novella or a novel but before i continue, can someone give me some feedback for my first chapter. It is a little short but I just want feedback on my writing style and what i should include, not grammar and spelling mistakes. Here it is:
It took so long, but I finally found one. A seat on the tram. As I sit there, I watch 100’s upon 100’s of people getting on and off. They were commuters, tourists, students and everyone in between. The sound of the tram bells are intoxicating, you really get a feel for the Melbourne culture, they are something unique to Melbourne. As my hands delve deep into my pockets, I realize that I only have $50 to spend. That is not nearly enough to buy new clothes at the shopping centre. Looks like Nathaniel and I will have to spend it at the markets. As I patiently wait to see him bored the tram, all I have to do is to look out the window and see the beauty a city has to offer, street art, buildings and parks. The minutes that pass feel like an eternity as I anxiously wait for Nathaniel. Finally after 5 minutes, he is there.
“Where have you been? I have been waiting for you for ages.” I said.
“Sorry” he replied, “My mum had me do a few things before I left home and it took me 20 minutes to walk to the city.”
It was such a relief to see him. Just the thought that something had happened to him would’ve devastated me.
“I only have $50 to spend so I think that we should go to the markets instead, I can’t buy new clothes and then buy food as well. Sorry” I added.
As Nathaniel and I walked through the streets and alleyways, he began to look at me with a smile, and then let out a giggle.
“What? What is it?” I asked.
“Nothing Ryan, I just…….. never mind” he laughed.
I knew that something was different about him that day. Something that I could never have put my finger on, it was too hard to work out what it was, until he told me.
As we slowly walked through the market stalls, we finally found a place to rest and have a meal. “You know how you were looking at me and then started to laugh a while ago” I said.
“Yer” he replied. “What about it?”
I continued “Well, what was that all about? It’s not really like you. Is there something wrong?”
“Well actually, nothing’s wrong, it’s just that there is something that I really should talk about but I am a little scared to.”
When he said those words, I was jumping ecstatically on the inside, but I kept a poker face on the outside. What could it have been? If he was looking at me and then laughed and he thinks that he should talk about it, then it concerns me. What if it’s good thing? All of these thought ran through my mind and it was making me excited. I had no idea what he was going to say, but from what I know, it’s about him and me.
“It’s OK” I replied “you can tell me anything, I’m your best friend, your secret is kept with me. I promise. Just tell me”
“I want to but it is so difficult to. You don’t know what I am going through.” He grunted. “It is so hard for me to understand all of this, let alone talking to you about it. Just please stop with the questions.”
I knew that something was bothering Nathaniel. I am his friend, and a friend should always look out for other friends. Nathaniel and I have been close to each other for more than 5 years. This was something that he would never do. He would tell me anything, even if I had nothing to do with it. Him not wanting me to know something is not a part of his persona.
“You know what, I Have to go now. My mum wants me home by 3pm.” Nathaniel quickly uttered. He left the table and then rushed out of the markets and left. Something was bothering him immensely, and I have to help, but if I don’t know what it is, then how?

This isn’t the beginning. i was just seeing if it was okay.
“David, we need to go NOW!” She exclaimed, and pulled me up. In the air a large aeris-copter was slowly descending to the ground. The sharp blades threatened to sliced us into bacon bits.I grasped my dagger and followed her back into the forest.
We didn’t make it far before Amber collapsed, unconscious.Blood was now slowly falling from her leg. I could still feel the wind on my back as I lifted her into the air. She wouldn’t make it if we didn’t speed our pace.My muscles tensed as I took on her full weight. Quickly I began to run. Branches and leaves were slapping in my face. Heavy sweat poured down my face as I gradually got slower. Amber slowly got heavier. I was as blind as a mouse when I half ran half fell out of the forest.
I was home. More importantly I was alive.
They called it Summermount. The name was given because the sun shone for most of the day. It was always warm here. Winter was just another useless word without any importance. I loved it here. After all it was my one and only home. The market, homes, and port made it one of the business cities around. I knew the place like the back of my hand for occasions just like this.
I threw our weapons into a bush and walked slowly into the city. If I was caught by an Overseer it was probably worth 20 lashes or worse. We weren’t supposed to hunt. It was against everything they stood for. There goal was to crush ever ambition. Ever dream we ever had and replace it with their poisonous vision.
It wasn’t easy getting Amber in. I had to slip around buildings and duck in to alleyways. Once I even had to throw her into a stack of hay. I turned the corner where Amber’s parents small restaurant was. I ducked into the doorway and ran into her mother who was serving a drink to some patrons.
“Hello Mrs Quartz.” I whispered.
“Good morning David dear,” she said,occupied serving the honey mead. “ I have some food around back.” I muttered my thanks. I wasn’t going to be the one to tell her about Amber’s injury. Last time she was hurt from a simple thorn her mother smashed a hot skillet into my face. This time I expected worse. I wasn’t going to risk that so I quickly went through the kitchen,snatched some soup, and jogged up to their apartment.
Everything in their home had an exact place. It was like the library at school but bigger in different places. Firstly it was circular. Everything was based in their small little main room. Doors lead into closets and bedrooms. Everything had a theme. White curtains to block sunlight from the small window with red rugs and couches to make it look more elegant. A walk in room had an office where Mr. Quartz was scribbling away. I could sleep in and out unnoticed with my soft leather shoes.
Silent as a mouse I slipped into Amber’s room and layed her down on her purple bed. I locked her door, ignoring all of the posters of teenage heartthrobs then tucked under her sheets. Her peaceful face stirred as I made her sip the rest of my water. I slung by pack over my shoulder and pushed open her window to climb on a small balcony.
“Goodbye.” I muttered and climbed away.
After I carefully climbed from the building I walked slowly toward the sea. Citizens pushed past as the yellow sun set. Soon the curfew would begin and wanderers would be shot on sight. As I was pushing against the crowd I felt a hand brush against my pocket. A thief! Instinct took over as I grabbed the robber by his hand. He pushed me into an alley and took out a polished iron dagger.The razor-sharp blade was barely on my skin yet small droplets of thick red blood dripped down into the dirt.
“What do you want?” I managed to croak. The man’s sweat covered matted hair smelled like mud and blood. His beard made him look wiser.
“ I want to warn you,” he answered. “Stay secret stay safe.”
Before I could ask him what was going on he slipped a brown package in my pocket and charged into the dense swarm. I jumped into the crowd.
I know its not the best I have to finish it and edit. I need to know some skills I need to work on.