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Please help me to point out the positives and negatives of my essay. Be honest and harsh if necessary.
The ____’s are places where I am still trying to come up with something to say.
I’m still concerned about these things:
– Grammar
– Fluidity
– Content
– How it transitions from the first to second paragraph seems funky
– How to effectively continue – the main purpose is supposed to be the challenges of being an entrepreneur at 16
and just my transitions in general…
Ever since my childhood, I have always been passionate about art, in all of its versatile and varying forms. From the days I spent teaching myself how to braid hair at the age of five so that I could practice creative hairstyles on my grandmother, to the hours I spent awestruck in front of a glowing computer screen designing birthday cards for my friends in elementary school, this certain passion of mine had grown immensely at such a young age. However, like all the other children at that time, I dreamt of becoming something extraordinary, like an astronaut, an archaeologist, or a part of the FBI. It wasn’t until the very beginning of my teenage years that I realized that the only thing that had been with me throughout my entire life was art. Amidst all of my peaks and valleys, it had always been there in the forefront of my life. So I pursued it.
By the time I was twelve, I found my true calling, my niche in the art world. Graphic design. It was the perfect combination of my love for all mediums of art and my growing appreciation for computers and the digital age.
During the summer between my junior and senior years of high school, I combined my ever prevalent passion for art, my inordinate thirst for knowledge, and my intensifying curiosity of “the real world”. I became an entrepreneur at the age of sixteen.
Sixteen was a ____ time of my life. It was a time where I _____. At sixteen, I learned how to drive. At sixteen, I became the editor of my high school’s yearbook. At sixteen, I started my own graphic and web design business, Beauxlent. At sixteen, I turned this challenge into an opportunity.

My friend is 14 years old and I am very close to him. I know that its impossible to see your friends everyday. But my situation is different. I was homeschooled and really had no friends growing up and now that I am quite a bit older,in college, I met a very nice friend and don’t want to lose him, what shall I do? I have seen it happen with me before, friends gradually drift away and am scared to death this may happen someday and am determined to do anything I can to see him everyday, why do people grow apart? I did nothing to my previous friendships, they just grew up and found other niches?
I feel like I only get happiness thru others, cant make myself happy at all, and am like living thru him. My mother and I had a codependant relationship before she passed away, and I was an only child. At least my father is still alive.
I have no reason why college students my age will not be friends with me. I am not that shy in class, I go to class and then go home, I am a male of 5 feet 3 inches. Is that the reason why? I am 27 years old, am sure that I do not look like a baby! I am very emotionally unstable, but I am extremely intelligent – that might be the problem. I feel as if I am an adult child. Can anyone eleborate more on any of this please? No one in our family has had an answer, the antidepressants don’t seem to work, I have been to psychologist after psychologist after psychologist. If you need any more info I will gladly provide it.

So I’ll try to keep this succinct: so creative writing is pretty much my passion/my niche in life and I took this class my freshman year of college three years ago with an AMAZING professor who resonated so well for me, he taught me so much and I definitely saw myself in him, and essentially, he just inspired me so much. So I started a novel around a year later after thinking about his class and the impact it had on me. Well the thing that impacted me the most was when he wrote on one of my essays once: “Do you write a lot? It sure seems to me like you write a lot, given your style.” he gave me many other compliments as well that just got me to think. So currently, I’m about 90 pages into this novel that I just feel it’s a story I NEED to tell would it be completely inappropriate if I emailed this old professor (he’s a published novelist as well, with lots of connections too) and ask him to be my mentor, or at the very least read what I’ve got so far in my novel and comment on it? It’s my dream and if he could be an advocate to make it happen that would be miraculous! He’s a nice guy too, but it’s still intimidating. He was once the writer in residence at a major university.
S would I make a fool out of myself to ask or no?? What are the pros and cons?? He probably doesn’t even remember who I am…

So I’ll try to keep this succinct: so creative writing is pretty much my passion/my niche in life and I took this class my freshman year of college three years ago with an AMAZING professor who resonated so well for me, he taught me so much and I definitely saw myself in him, and essentially, he just inspired me so much. So I started a novel around a year later after thinking about his class and the impact it had on me. Well the thing that impacted me the most was when he wrote on one of my essays once: “Do you write a lot? It sure seems to me like you write a lot, given your style.” he gave me many other compliments as well that just got me to think. So currently, I’m about 90 pages into this novel that I just feel it’s a story I NEED to tell would it be completely inappropriate if I emailed this old professor (he’s a published novelist as well, with lots of connections too) and ask him to be my mentor, or at the very least read what I’ve got so far in my novel and comment on it? It’s my dream and if he could be an advocate to make it happen that would be miraculous! He’s a nice guy too, but it’s still intimidating. He was once the writer in residence at a major university.
S would I make a fool out of myself to ask or no?? What are the pros and cons?? He probably doesn’t even remember who I am…

I live in Philadelphia. I’m trying to find a major in web development, not so much the design part (wouldn’t mind it, though) but the coding (php, jquery, and all of those fancy stuff including basics like html and css, etc.)
The only college/university I could find was Drexel, but Drexel is a private university and it’s EXPENSIVE. I need to attend a state affiliated college but I can’t find one with the major I want. I talked to my counselor and he seem a little clueless about web development.

I may be moving to Atlanta so I would like to know of some Baptist affiliated Bible Colleges near there.