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So I’m writing a book called Samantha’s Asylum. Tell me what you think.
I was walking home from school with the hot sun beating down on my neck. Thank God there was only one more day of school until summer vacation. Then Diana and I could go to the creek and swim together. “Samantha!” Momma called from the front porch. I picked up my speed along the beautiful path in the woods and came upon our home. It was wooden with a porch that held three rocking chairs.
I ran up to the porch, all smiles. “Momma, Diana wasn’t in school today.” I said after hugging her. Momma nodded and gazed at the horizon.
“You knew?”
“Yes.”
“How?”
“Mrs. Land, Diana’s mother, talked to me at the market today.” Momma was frowning and her blue eyes were sad. She put a hand on my shoulder and squeezed warmly.
“She had some very unfortunate news for me.”
‘What? Is Diana sick?”
“I’m afraid this morning she was.”
“This morning? What do you mean?”
“Diana went down by the creek for some fresh air. She waded through the water until her foot got caught in a root. She fell and she couldn’t get back up. Don’t worry, she’s safe in the Lord’s arms.” Momma said. I stared at her, not wanting to believe what I had just heard. But the sadness in her eyes was too real. I ran inside and pounded up the stairs.
“Samantha!” Momma called, hurrying up the steps. I opened my door and dropped my things on the ground. Momma came in and pulled me close. I started to cry. She put her arms around me and stroked my hair. I started to scream then. When we heard Papa’s wagon approaching the house, Momma ran down the stairs crying “Eric, Eric!”
OK So I know it’s not much, but alot more happens. she tries to kill herelf and her parents send her to an asylum. there she finds out secrets and stuff.

So I’m writing a book called Samantha’s Asylum. Tell me what you think.
I was walking home from school with the hot sun beating down on my neck. Thank God there was only one more day of school until summer vacation. Then Diana and I could go to the creek and swim together. “Samantha!” Momma called from the front porch. I picked up my speed along the beautiful path in the woods and came upon our home. It was wooden with a porch that held three rocking chairs.
I ran up to the porch, all smiles. “Momma, Diana wasn’t in school today.” I said after hugging her. Momma nodded and gazed at the horizon.
“You knew?”
“Yes.”
“How?”
“Mrs. Land, Diana’s mother, talked to me at the market today.” Momma was frowning and her blue eyes were sad. She put a hand on my shoulder and squeezed warmly.
“She had some very unfortunate news for me.”
‘What? Is Diana sick?”
“I’m afraid this morning she was.”
“This morning? What do you mean?”
“Diana went down by the creek for some fresh air. She waded through the water until her foot got caught in a root. She fell and she couldn’t get back up. Don’t worry, she’s safe in the Lord’s arms.” Momma said. I stared at her, not wanting to believe what I had just heard. But the sadness in her eyes was too real. I ran inside and pounded up the stairs.
“Samantha!” Momma called, hurrying up the steps. I opened my door and dropped my things on the ground. Momma came in and pulled me close. I started to cry. She put her arms around me and stroked my hair. I started to scream then. When we heard Papa’s wagon approaching the house, Momma ran down the stairs crying “Eric, Eric!”
OK So I know it’s not much, but alot more happens. she tries to kill herelf and her parents send her to an asylum. there she finds out secrets and stuff.

I am a junior from Detroit, Michigan. I was wondering if any body had some answers/advice for me and my quest to get into west point academy.
I have a 3.76 GPA, having aquired all A’s and A-‘s up to and including my first semester of Junior year.
I am attending the Summer Leadership Summit in the upcoming months at West Point.
I recieved a 30 on my ACT (31 math, 30 science, 29 english, 30 reading)
I play baseball,(just made varsity), and played football freshman, sophmore, and will play senior year.
I am a member of the National Honor Society and actively involved in my church and it’s various activities. i am also a member of a church small group.
I am wondering if anybody with knowledge of the school can help me by informing me of how good my chances are of getting in at this point. I understand this can be very opinionated but any help is much appreciated. Also any advice in activities/oppurtunities i should take hold of is very appreciated. IF you do somehow have an affiliation with the academy and/or were affiliated with it. please let me know. thank you!