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So, basically, I was given an assignment where I just write a ‘short story’- ( 50-85 pages) about any original plot I made up myself. I eventually came up with the idea Of a very stern, haughty police officer who is paired with the less-responsible daughter of the Police Chief against his will. When I handed in the mandatory plot sheet the teacher said it was fine, but I want to see if I should make the characters a bit more ‘realistic’. Below I have provided this template:
Name: Solomon Edward Janey ( Teasingly called ‘Sol’ by coworkers)
Age: 35
Personality: Very Proud, Straight-Forward way of thinking, Unsocial, Easily Annoyed, Hard-Working, and Insistent
Appearance: A ‘powder-like complexion’, dark gray eyes, and short, slightly graying dark brown hair.
History: The only child of a late Malpractice attorney and a nurse. He was raised in an average house in a solitary neighborhood, and spent more time with his mother than his father. Was known as a ‘braniac’ ( or rather, smart-alec) during school years, and graduated Magna *** Laude from Penn University. After spending two years in medical School, he decided to become a cop after witnessing a robbery in which the cops were obviously biased, and deciding that he would do a much better job. After becoming an official officer of PPD (Philadelphia Police Department) he soon established a very good place, living in a small townhouse making a modest salary. On his sixth year, he was paired with the slightly childish daughter of his boss against his will. He often finds himself arguing with her, but is forced to learn to cooperate when they are given the case of a murder of an heiress, and the attempted murder of her sister, who is now in their custody.
Name: Friday Bethany Allen
Age: 29
Personality: A bit of a slacker, slightly irresponsible, reluctant to take lead, quiet, childish, and thinks in ‘creative ways.’
Appearance: An olive complexion she inherited from her mother, brown eyes, and shoulder-length black hair.
History: Friday grew up with her single father and her younger brother. After having her mother leave at the age of 5, she became more introverted. Currently, it’s not as bad as it was, but it is very rare to find her chatting away. She dreams of becoming a detective after reading the complete Sherlock Holmes series, and was convinced by her father that becoming a Police Officer was the way to go. She was an average student, graduating with decent grades from her local community college. She just recently moved from her condo from the rest of her family to a small studio apartment in the city. When paired with Solomon on her first day she is turned off by his very cold attitude, but when given their first case, tries to get along with him.
Name: Alice Sophia Winston
Age: 21
Personality: Slightly-spoiled, sarcastic, logical, and very afraid.
Appearance: Milk-chocolate skin, wide brown eyes, and short black hair.
History: Alice grew up in a very large mansion, just outside of city-limits. Daughter of a business owner, and secret black-market seller, she grew up living a life of luxury. With full knowledge that as the youngest she would not receive the family fortune, she made sure to keep good relations with her sister. After the sudden death of her father, her sister’s own bloody murder during a fun night-on-the-town not even a month later, she is in fear of her own. Now in the care of the PPD, she finds herself under the custody of Friday and Solomon, two people whose constant arguing makes her feel as if she might just die anyway.
So when I passed it in, my teacher ( who was doing something on the computer) barley looked at it before handing It back without barley saying anything. To ensure I get the best grade possible, I would like some feedback on these three characters. Are they realistic? Are they developed enough? Please tell!

Over the last few years members of my family have been dying in suspicious circumstances. My father “accidentally” fell on a rake as he was walking our dog 2 years ago. Then, 1 year later my mother was attacked my a pack of vicious Alsatians that I know for a fact our “pet” dog was affiliated with. Lastly, my brother brought our “precious” pit bull out hunting with him one day and later we found him with his head blown off. The cops said it was preposterous that it was Rex, but I had my suspicions. I checked for paw prints and bingo.. they were his. Now it’s just me and him…. him with his constant staring at me. It’s either him or me, and now I think it’s time to fight back.

Hello Everyone 🙂
I need some a Opinion/Help.
I am 18 years old but i want to start getting my life started
Currently in this year i want to get my Car driver license but i can’t.
My father died about 1 year and half with Stomach cancer, since then we have been receiving Money pension. I want to start working but my mother and my brother don’t let me.
Why do i fix this Dilemma?
Is there anyway for me to win money in the more “Easily” way?
Using some kind of secret in the economy or on the Stock Market
How to Make Money in the Stock Market During the the Economic Crisis and Profit from the Recession?
Is there anyway for me to gain money without loosing my father pension
btw: The pension money doesn’t go for me, it goes for the food. And my brother is a rich guy but he doesn’t tell how to make sucess, HELP?
I am from Portugal
P.S – My mother and my brother and extremely controlling me, i can’t have my own life with them stopping me! (I feel angry, suffocated and annoyed with that)

Hello Everyone 🙂
I need some a Opinion/Help.
I am 18 years old but i want to start getting my life started
Currently in this year i want to get my Car driver license but i can’t.
My father died about 1 year and half with Stomach cancer, since then we have been receiving Money pension. I want to start working but my mother and my brother don’t let me.
Why do i fix this Dilemma?
Is there anyway for me to win money in the more “Easily” way?
Using some kind of secret in the economy or on the Stock Market
How to Make Money in the Stock Market During the the Economic Crisis and Profit from the Recession?
Is there anyway for me to gain money without loosing my father pension
btw: The pension money doesn’t go for me, it goes for the food. And my brother is a rich guy but he doesn’t tell how to make sucess, HELP?
I am from Portugal
P.S – My mother and my brother and extremely controlling me, i can’t have my own life with them stopping me! (I feel angry, suffocated and annoyed with that)

Hello Everyone 🙂
I need some a Opinion/Help.
I am 18 years old but i want to start getting my life started
Currently in this year i want to get my Car driver license but i can’t.
My father died about 1 year and half with Stomach cancer, since then we have been receiving Money pension. I want to start working but my mother and my brother don’t let me.
Why do i fix this Dilemma?
Is there anyway for me to win money in the more “Easily” way?
Using some kind of secret in the economy or on the Stock Market
How to Make Money in the Stock Market During the the Economic Crisis and Profit from the Recession?
Is there anyway for me to gain money without loosing my father pension
btw: The pension money doesn’t go for me, it goes for the food. And my brother is a rich guy but he doesn’t tell how to make sucess, HELP?
I am from Portugal
P.S – My mother and my brother and extremely controlling me, i can’t have my own life with them stopping me! (I feel angry, suffocated and annoyed with that)

Hello Everyone 🙂
I need some a Opinion/Help.
I am 18 years old but i want to start getting my life started
Currently in this year i want to get my Car driver license but i can’t.
My father died about 1 year and half with Stomach cancer, since then we have been receiving Money pension. I want to start working but my mother and my brother don’t let me.
Why do i fix this Dilemma?
Is there anyway for me to win money in the more “Easily” way?
Using some kind of secret in the economy or on the Stock Market
How to Make Money in the Stock Market During the the Economic Crisis and Profit from the Recession?
Is there anyway for me to gain money without loosing my father pension
btw: The pension money doesn’t go for me, it goes for the food. And my brother is a rich guy but he doesn’t tell how to make sucess, HELP?
I am from Portugal
P.S – My mother and my brother and extremely controlling me, i can’t have my own life with them stopping me! (I feel angry, suffocated and annoyed with that)